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Stopping the Fat Guy

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Quincy Quiver, local hero and Crime fighter extraordinaire, is finishing up his holiday checklist when he first hears of Santa Claus. Surely a man responsible for worldwide break-ins on Christmas Eve is up to no good. Hero senses tingling, Quincy sets out to end the cookie thief's mischief and discover his true intentions once and for all.

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First published November 12, 2013

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Benjamin H. Hebert

3 books11 followers
Just a 25 year old trying to find his way in the world. I've always wanted to write or at least create stories since I was younger. The whole process of creating, and just letting ideas form themselves into words on a page is exhilarating. I guess you could say I became serious about writing 2 years ago. 23 years into life and it finally clicked. I knew what I really wanted to do. What I must do, really. I attribute most of the motivation to the death of my grandfather, who I was really close with. Writing helped ease the pain I guess.

Stopping the Fat Guy is my first novel. It started as a short story I wrote in middle school and is now a full novel! That fact still blows my mind. The world can finally experience Quincy Quiver with me, and I couldn't be happier.

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Profile Image for Alejandro.
1,192 reviews3,694 followers
October 20, 2016
Not so merry book as I'd expected.


The author contacted me and I received a copy of the book in exchange of a honest review.


THE QUICK

It's a funny, smart, well written and entertaining novel.


THE GOOD

Its own universe:

The author showed a lot of creativity making his own world in the story. He created a fictional city where his characters operate that it's quite normal in many stories involving super-heroes but he even went beyond of that and he created many original details like a new currency system, a very unique measuring system, even a particular list of gods and saints.

The narrator style:

The author developed a very entertained style of storytelling, with many priceless moments giving a very good experience while reading the novel. Also, the book presented priceless moments such as an "intermission".

Characters:

The story had a rich quantity of characters with funny cool names, honoring the clichés of super-hero comic books, presenting double initials on their names. (Examples: Artemis Artook, Rusty Russell, Tipsy Tina, etc...)

Honoring his Grandfather:

It's indeed priceless the moments where the main character had with his grandfather, since it's a wonderful mirror of the real relationship between the author and his own grandfather. Always, in any fictional novel, those kind of reality moments merging with the story are what make good books.


THE BAD

Cover and map:

I think that it could be real helpful to find some artist friend and/or some photographer friend and creating a more "professional looking" cover to increase the interest of reader to try this good book. Also, there is a map of the land where the characters are, in this case also, the help of some friend with skills to make "professional looking" maps could boost the impact of readers.

Originality of Main character's name and city's:

It's too evident that the main character is based on DC Comics' Green Arrow, since the main character's name is "Quincy Quiver" and the city is named "Queen City". Green Arrow's real identity is Oliver Queen, and there is a major storyline titled "Quiver". I know that even Green Arrow is based on Robin Hood but at the end, the only similarity is that both are archers. However, in here, choosing that name for the character but even more, the choosing of the city's name gives a too clear message of that it's taken from the DC Comics' character. There isn't any scene where another kind of signature weapon couldn't work just the same, so, maybe selecting another kind of weapon instead of a bow and arrows and definitely another name for the city, could be real beneficial to present a more original main character and his city.

By the way, there is a scene with some "cookie minions", but that already appeared in the animated movie Despicable Me. Since it's not a really crutial scene, it could be better to avoid using something so recognizable.

Use of Spanish by the sidekick:

The main character, "Quincy Quiver", has a sidekick named "Klyde". This sidekick has some undefined Spanish origin. And while it's a common cliché to present Latin characters with dialogues mixing English and Spanish, there is a moment when it's just too often and too overwhelmed the use of this cliché. Also, while maybe the misuse of Spanish words can be intentional for humorous intention, it's misused so many times and in so many forms that the humorous intention is getting lost and the possibility of ignorance on real Spanish knowledge rises. Spanish is my first language, so honestly there were over uses of words like "ese" at the end of each sentence that became quite tedious to read. Also, I didn't know what was the intention of words like "homes", besides a clear form instead of "man", I never heard before "homes" in proper or slang Spanish. Also, there are several words with grammatical/spelling errors like "vamanos", "verdado", "miras", etc... that honestly, can be felt like "racist" since it can be interpreted as telling that a Latin person can't speak proper full English sentences but even isn't able to speak his own native language. I am sure that it wasn't the intention of the author but when it's used any character of certain ethnicity, religion, sexual preference, etc... the writer has to be careful to avoid negative reactions by readers of those particular groups.

The Odd

Length, focus, and climax of the story:

The book started as a short story and evolved to a novel. However I think that it could be better to remain as a short story or making two books: One, presenting the main characters and his world with an adventure against a regular villain. Two, with the character and his world already established, it can be engaged the theme of using "Santa Claus". Also, I think that the "climax" of the story is solved in too easy way but even after that extending the book with like 2 or 3 more chapters when the "climax" already passed.

Santa Claus and the image about him for everybody

You get so many images and opinions about "Santa Claus" by several characters and moments in the story that at the end, it gets kinda messy to distinguish what's the "reality" inside the storyline of the book. Two opposite images were important to develop but the adding of others comments about "Santa Claus" started to construct a confusing image about him inside the novel.





Profile Image for Hock Tjoa.
Author 8 books91 followers
December 8, 2015
This is a literate attempt to be funny, told in the first person and sounding at times like a riff on Tristram Shandy and otherwise like a tall tale. These are the stories of Quincy Quiver, super-hero extraordinaire, who speaks of "My accomplishments: my run-in with the pirates, my expedition into the mysterious land known as Unexplored and Unimportant, my epic battles with Milton the Magician, and the mishap with a terrible penguin."

We are introduced to Artemis Artook-- "We were kind of dating at the time.... we spent a couple of nights beating up a bully or two together. Something about her right hook used to drive me crazy." Never mind that there is that odd reference to "my wife [who] blows Aphrodite away." Nor that there is Klyde, QQ's Odd Couplish roommate, devised perhaps for the Latino vote.

More problematic, in my humble opinion, is the sequence of events and the mix of tenses that are used to describe them. The author would have us believe that it is intentional. He declares, "I think I have come up with the best story progression and you, my friend, are going to be the guinea pig."

Unfortunately, he does not convince me, a mere reader.

I was given a free copy of this book in exchange for an honest review.
Profile Image for Brandon Collier.
Author 19 books71 followers
July 31, 2016
Quincy Quiver first hears of Santa Claus, and upon investigation, he decides that this criminal must be stopped. I had fun with this novel. It's a witty take on the Christmas holiday and somewhat entertaining. I'm not a fan of first person novels but this one was okay, although the author tried too hard to show personality. The narration was sometimes too introspective and reverted to rambling. Quincy Quiver's outlook on the world and of Santa placed a fresh twist on the status quo. Character development was okay as well as the storyline, but I wonder who the target audience is for this novel. All in all, a solid read.
Profile Image for Kara Prem.
770 reviews6 followers
February 5, 2014
Quincy Quiver is a hero - it's well known all around town. He's a bit old and tends to ramble now, but it's so nice of you to stop by for a visit. He'd love to share a story with you, a story of a Christmas years ago when he set out to stop a terrible person - someone named Santa Claus!

No really, Quincy had never heard of Santa until that Christmas, when he was told by many different people about the "un-thief" who sneaks into your home and leaves stuff - the nerve!

It's an odd tale, with colorful characters. Quincy has a girlfriend, Artemis Artook, a hero on her own, who doesn't think Santa's a threat at all, but Rusty Russell his grandfather has had his own run-ins with Santa, and they reached a 50 year truce, which has expired, explaining why Quincy is going to actually have a visit from Santa this year.

Quincy sets out to defend his hideout, the Golden Fleece with his trusty sidekick Klyde. They have a few secret weapons, including a dangerous Easter bunny named Snuggles (who is anything but) and circus peanuts....

Not a deep and meaningful read, but an easy and fun one. Sometimes that's the best thing to have.
Profile Image for Ibiloye Christian.
Author 14 books21 followers
November 17, 2015
QUINCY QUIVER'S BEST CHRISTMAS EVER!
After being done with the read, it was obvious the memoir is for children- a sort of folk tale about christmas but with sci-fi and delightful fantasy about food, like Bacon and Ham. The main Character was introduced in the prologue as, the great Quincy Quiver, crime fighter extraordinaire and damn protector to grace Queen City.

Using his Pocket chemistry kit with a skewer and tricks with others,
he set about investigating the fat Santa Claus , exploring Chistmas time and battling with the temptation of foods. He must watch his fat intake and health as he had a good time with other children like Artemis , and characters like Tipsy Tina, (an old drunken cashier lost to the world) Klyde, the legendary Rusty Russell and Milton.

The memoir that recorded events from December 24th is in 23 chapters followed by an epilogue. Funny, boisterous and childish imaginations and fantasy. Songs, (dong, dong, dong,) poems and food recipes are there too.

This nonsensical ideas built into a memoir about Santa Claus, Quincy experience, lessons for Christmas, Saint Nicholas ,etc can be adapted for either.a children cartoon or film.

However, I did not like the maps, and the cover, there are better choices to draw attention to this children book.
I received a copy of this ebook for a non reciprocal and honest review.
Profile Image for Scott Spotson.
Author 16 books109 followers
November 4, 2015
Chalk it up to the author for being daring and displaying imagination.

However, I think this book would have worked better as a very short children's story, for ages 6-12, to join the ranks of books in the line of the heart-warming plot of "at first, people scorn Santa's existence, but it turns out he's very real" and incorporate the light humour from this book.

I could tell the author was trying very hard to expand a book out of a simple premise: from one perspective, much of what Santa does could be construed as illegal or immoral (i.e. "breaking into" people's houses, giving coal to naughty children, and leaving behind some undesired gifts, i.e. ugly sweaters or ties). I liked this premise, but it didn't work in this book.

As said, I do think this premise can work very well in a wacky children's book, just focusing on that one premise, without the adult themes or without the extraneous chapters (i.e. a chapter about fighting a giant Easter Bunny, or a chapter about ordering pizza then a snowball fight... yes, a whole chapter on that).

One thing puzzled me... if Klyde is a native Spanish speaker, why does his name not seem Spanish?

All in all, it had dashes of brilliance. But I think the author tried too hard to make do with an entertaining premise.

Profile Image for Darrell Nelson.
Author 17 books35 followers
December 17, 2015
As the title and description imply, this is a way out there comedy. At times a bit too way out there, but at times it's great. There were lots of zany characters, truly bizarre situations, and a, purposefully, confused rambling narration. Does all this go over the top? Often times yes. However the times it works, it works fantastic.
During my reading, at times I was laughing out loud, at other times I was truly baffled. Some of the descriptions lost me, others have me smiling every time I think about them.
The author says the idea for this started in eighth grade, to some extent it shows, but mostly he has taken the time to further refine the ideas. Credit does have to be given to the amount of work he has done in getting this book to a readable state. I look forward to when he takes the skills he has learned in getting this book to this state, and uses those on an new book.
I'm giving it a four stars, because the times all the aspects of the book come together, it is fantastic. As I mentioned before when they don't work, they left me totally baffled. Some of the imagery will stick in my head for a long time to come. With a book like this, your individual experience will vary greatly.
I received a free copy of this book in exchange for an honest review.
Profile Image for John Tolliver.
Author 5 books2 followers
June 14, 2016
This book was a bit hard to figure out at first, but I did end up enjoying the deeper I dove in the chapters. Was it a children’s book? Was it a cartoonish book for adults? The first chapter made me feel like it was a children’s book, the second chapter made me feel I was wrong, but it wasn’t until I got past past those before I saw the story defining itself.
I loved the writers play on words, and the main characters narrative of looking at societal norms that we take for granted, and questioning them for their absolute meaning, rather than their accepted ones. I found some characters to be masterfully complete creations (Rusty Russell), where I felt he totally gave me a complete picture of who they were, while others I thought were missing pieces from their character puzzle.
My feeling was it was expanded a bit too much from its original shorter version in not the most sensible way. It just seemed like there was a bit more filler on parts where it wasn’t needed, and not enough on parts where it was lacking.
The book reminded me of a Jim Carrey movie. Not a lot of surprises to the storyline, but found the characters fun and scattered, liked the grittier parts that snuck into the storyline, and overall found the book to be amusing and a fun read.
Profile Image for Michelle Read.
Author 8 books20 followers
March 18, 2014
I loved the writing style of this book. It's something I haven't mastered, being able to show more than you tell. Very much enjoyed the read, it moved right along and was very descriptive, enjoyable and original. It was very comic-book-y, the world that the author created, and that worked for me. The super heroes really do wear capes, and really do grocery shop with their arch nemesis.

The part that made me smile the most was when Quincy Quiver, the main character was introducing us to his wife. I loved that! He has a respect for her that wasn't mushy and, coming from a male author, I found it refreshing that he would shine such an awesome light on her.

I also liked the relationship that QQ had with his grandfather. A funny old man who passes gas and pretends not to notice. Um, yes. That was definitely real-world!

Overall, a great read....though I hope the author does another book with QQ as the main character and gets into the details of his original adventures. I do like the storytelling set-up, and will be watching to see if more books about Quincy and Klyde in action come about. I'd love to read that.
Profile Image for Diana Febry.
Author 20 books174 followers
June 14, 2016
I'd recommend this very imaginative fantasy book to readers looking for a fun, light-hearted read.
For reasons explained in the story local crime fighting hero Quincy has never heard of Santa Claus. When he hears about a shady character who breaks in to everyone's house on Christmas eve he sets out to investigate. On discovering this breaking & entering non-thief also has an army of Elf spies employed to judge each and every individual and report back on whether they are naughty or nice he is outraged. After a discussion with his grandfather he booby traps his house and prepares to arrest Santa.
An easy to read, chatty writing style made this an entertaining quick read.
The problem with writing humour is not everyone finds the same type of things funny. I found the read mildly amusing and a little silly but that's due to my personal sense of humour. I'm sure there are lots of readers who will find the ridiculous situations Quincy gets himself into hilarious.
My suggestion is, if you enjoy funny reads take advantage of the free Amazon sample. If the brand of humour appeals and tickles your funny bone then download the rest of the book.
Profile Image for Pamela Canepa.
Author 11 books126 followers
December 29, 2016
This book was entertaining at times. The superhero does seem to lack certain cultural knowledge, specifically about the story of Santa Claus, and I find that a little hard to believe. Nonetheless, I as a reader can suspend that belief, (I am not sure we call could) and it is fun to follow the story on how he wants to bring down the Claus, as is his nature as a superhero to stop someone who is up to no good in his city.
The world he creates here is quite odd and unique, with new names for money, among other things. There is a humor evident in his details, especially the many different types of ham available for Christmas. I found that enjoyable, however, I feel like he should clarify his audience. He narrates in a voice to us as if we, the readers, are children, yet, there is adult humor included in many places.
It is an interesting story with suspense and action, but I do feel some clarification in his tone would be helpful. It's definitely light-hearted with occasional dark humor, and any potential reader in search of such a thing will find that.
January 1, 2015
Such a great read! This book has a great storyline, entertaining and well developed characters and a unique perspective. The relationships between characters are well developed and leave the reader wanting more stories.

This is an excellent read and I highly recommend it.
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Author 2 books66 followers
October 30, 2015
Great book full of folly, suspense, originality, and humor. If you like comics and hero-tales, you'll enjoy this book from cover to cover. Stopping the Fat Guy is unique and thrilling. A fine beginning to what is sure to be a long series of books for Quincy Quiver and Klyde.
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Author 7 books8 followers
June 20, 2017
This fun and light-hearted book follows Quincy Quivers as he attempts to thwart the dirty thief Santa Claus. I enjoyed it because it was an easy, light read that made me laugh a few times. I would recommend it for anyone who likes a tale out of the ordinary that doesn't take things too seriously.
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