Talk:Fragile (Tech N9ne song)

Latest comment: 10 years ago by DepressedPer in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: DepressedPer (talk · contribs) 07:19, 11 July 2014 (UTC)Reply

I'll be taking the position of reviewing this article. It'll take a while so be patient.

Here are a couple of key issues I found:

  • Add the YouTube video link in the infobox.
  • "...and vocal from ¡Mayday! and Kendall Morgan." > Should be written as "...and the chorus is sung by ¡Mayday! and Kendall Morgan."
  • Refs. 6 and 7 in the Background section are the same; Add a ref name to the first one to remove the duplicate.
  • "Overall the song details each rapper's disdain for media criticism, and they address the critics and journalists that write about their music." Remove "Overall" and capitalize the "T".
  • "Overall the instrumental is a brokenhearted guitar and piano-based beat. It consists of "a simple drum pattern for the verses before escalating with keys and guitar riffs for the hook." Try and merge these two into one with their refs intact. Reword "brokenhearted guitar"; doesn't sound right.
  • Remove the info for US Heatseekers Songs; we already have US Bubbling Under Hot 100.
      Done STATic message me! 09:34, 24 July 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • Pictures of both Tech N9ne and Kendrick Lamar would help improve the article.
  • Should have an External links section with the Metrolyrics added.

That's what I found so far but its an otherwise well-written article. Nice work. DepressedPer (talk) 17:52, 19 July 2014 (UTC)Reply

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