Talk:John C. H. Lee/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 13:22, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   • Petty, and won't hold up promotion, but pick use of the serial comma, or not. Don't switch between. (see "when he became District Engineer of the Washington District, in charge of Potomac River watershed, northwestern Chesapeake Bay, and the Washington, D.C., water supply." and, earlier "Panama Canal Zone, Guam and the Philippines")

     Y Removed the comma. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • You link to United States Military Academy at West Point. However, West Point redirects to the first link. Remove the West point link, or change to United States Military Academy at West Point.

     Y Corrected the link. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "He then directed various districts around Washington, D.C., and Philadelphia," are these still flood districts? clarify if not.

     Y Added "engineer" Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • Link to Attack on Pearl Harbor on first mention. I'd also like to see a link to European Theater of Operations, United States Army.

     Y Done Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • does his high school have a name? if so, please add and (if possible) link.

     Y Added, but it's a red link. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • Is it normal to have "as discussed below" in a Wikipedia article? I'd recommend removal.

     Y Deleted Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • Where is Wheeling. Link?

     Y Somebody tried moving the text around so that it was not in chronological order. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • How much time did he spend in Detroit? is there a time span?

     Y From 12 September to 2 December 1909. Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:41, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "he Panama Canal Zone in May 1910, after which he was posted to Rock Island, Illinois, in May 1910," I see that both happened in May 1910. Is there a time frame for how long he was in Panama?

     Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:41, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "which was being deployed to Texas City, Texas on the Mexican Border due to the Mexican Revolution." perhaps say "as a result of the Mexican Revolution" or "in response to the Mexican Revolution."

     Y I wouldn't have thought it was the main result, but done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:41, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

     just a suggestion. If you think otherwise, please change. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:27, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "December 1914, to June 1915" is the comma necessary?

     Y Removed the comma. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:24, 3 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "United States formally became at war with Germany." saying became at war is a bit clunky, perhaps change to "formally declared war on Germany"

     Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "Lee was disappointed at the failure of Wood's quest for the Republican nomination in the 1920 presidential election," change linking to "Lee was disappointed at the failure of Wood's quest for the Republican nomination...

     Y Done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • Is the right United Congress linked? perhaps you mean United States congress?

     Y Done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "The headquarters of the Mississippi River Commission moved from St Louis to Vicksburg, where it was located at the centre of the flood area but well above the level of the river. " is there a year for this?

     Y 1928. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • Did Marshall give a reason for telling Lee to train a replacement?

     Y Added a bit. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "had commanding the Pacific Ports of Embarkation," perhaps you meant "had commanded the Pacific Ports of Embarkation," or "was commanding the Pacific Ports of Embarkation,"?

     Y Changed to "had commanded" Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • What is the criticism mentioned in the quote?

     Y Added "[that it was an extravagance]" in way of explanation. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • Fortunately, some lessons had been learned from 1942." is it acceptable to say fortunately? See WP:EDITORIAL

     Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "who source to place logistical functions under his command." Should it be "who sought to place logistical functions under his command.

     Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "courts martial earlier in his career." perhaps add a mention of this earlier in the article.

     Y I can't find this. Removed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • "While the logistical arrangements for D-Day proceeded well, although nobody congratulated Lee on the achievement." Also be careful here about editorializing. I am sure that somebody congratulated him somewhere. Also, it reads like a sentence fragment.

     Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

   • That's it. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:27, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

   Sources do not need to be repeated in the same paragraph ( i.e. 17 in the first para of Retirement and honors, 17 in first para of post war career, and 4 in the third para of Early military engineer career.)

   Y Removed redundant references. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:03, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

   The General who Wore Six Stars cites Wikipedia. concerned about reliability.Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:33, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

   The book is reliable. It is by a reputable publisher, and I know where everything comes from. The Wikipedia was only used for the biography of Robert Ruark. See my review of the book in the Bugle. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:53, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Perhaps could use more images, but if none are available, so be it. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 22:09, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

   Y Added some additional images. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:03, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

   File:Memo from John C. H. Lee, 26 December 1944.jpg should have the correct author, not 'United States Army'.

   Y Added author information. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:03, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: