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2018 KS Bull Issue 2
2018 KS Bull Issue 2
KS Bull 2018
Issue 2
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CONTENTS
11 Paper 2 – AQ Response 45
Huang Bairun | 18S06A
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12 Paper 2 - Passage 47
13 Paper 2 – Response 48
Samuel Foo Hern Kai | 19A01A
14 Assess the view that women have been unfairly treated today. 51
Chew Jay Hong | 19A13A
Editorial Team 76
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Ivan Toh Sheng Wei | 1A01A
Can governments claim to be by the people, of the people and for the people if
they do not listen to the voices of the people? In an age of populist governments
rising to power by tapping on the grievances of the silent majority, it would seem
that governments should always listen to their people so that the government
can fulfil its duty of serving the people’s needs better and implement policies
more effectively with the people’s support. However, the more complex and
nuanced reality is that governments should take the people’s views into
consideration but not always follow the popular opinion in policy-making since
the masses might suffer from information asymmetry, might only consider their
own short-term benefit, and neglect the most vulnerable actors or elements of
our society. Thus, in order to fulfil the objectives of any good government, which
would be to improve the lives of people and stay in power, governments should
not always listen to their people but consider the advice of technocratic experts
or abide by higher principles enshrined in the constitution.
Firstly, it could be argued that governments should always listen to the people
as acting on the needs of the people would allow governments to effectively
serve the people and improve their living standards, since it is likely that the
masses would know their own needs and solutions the best. Most governments
around the world are democratically elected into power, which means that
citizens have given them their mandate and trust. These elected representatives
are thus expected to live up to the expectations placed on them by listening
keenly to the feedback of citizens, and implementing legislation that will address
the needs of the citizens. Even for authoritarian governments or non-elected
components of the government such as the civil service or the judiciary, the onus
is still on the government to adequately meet the needs and demands of the
citizens since they have placed their trust in the system. Furthermore, the masses
would be most in touch with their own daily concerns since they are informed
by their own lived daily experiences, in contrast to bureaucrats in ivory towers
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trying to second guess what citizens want. Hence, governments should listen to
the feedback and votes of citizens to decide what legislation to implement and
how it should be implemented. A salient example of the government listening to
its people in order to accurately reflect the desires of the masses would be Prime
Minister Mahathir of Malaysia and his newly elected Pakatan Harapan government,
who decided to abolish Malaysia’s 6% Goods and Services Tax (GST) and opened
an investigation into Malaysia’s sovereign wealth fund 1MDB, since these were
the demands of the majority of Malaysians, who felt that current GST levels and
government corruption were severely hampering their ability to maintain their
purchasing power and Malaysia’s long-term economic development. In contrast,
the Barisan National government of Malaysia was voted out because they were
stubborn and out of touch on issues such as GST and their refusal to clamp down
on corruption. Thus, governments should always listen to the people to
accurately meet the people’s needs and improve the people’s standard of living.
However, while the above arguments make a compelling case for why
governments should listen to people, governments should not always listen to
the people since the masses may suffer from a lack of information, resulting in a
not well-informed population pushing for policies that are actually detrimental
for the masses. Governments often have more information on more issues than
the masses since they can hire researchers to conduct in-depth studies on certain
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social trends or use advanced and expensive modelling technology to predict the
economic and social impact of a policy. Governments also have access to a wide
database of records and expert specialists in vital sectors such as healthcare and
defence to help inform their decisions. This asymmetry of information means
that governments may be able to recognise external third party benefits to
society in implementing policies, or potential negative consequences, which the
average voter might not consider since the voter is most likely seeking to
maximise his or her own short-term benefit. Hence, governments need to
intervene for the greater societal good or to safeguard certain positive outcomes
which are unknowingly being erased. One example would be the Clean Air Act
in the United States, which was passed in 1990, forcing factories to cut their
emissions of pollutants such as Sulphur Dioxide by up to half though the
environmental reforms were perceived to be harming industry and thus
unpopular at the time. A 2011 Environmental Protection Agency study on the
effects of the Clean Air Act validated such a move as the Clean Air Act led to
the US producing 1.5 million tons less of air pollution, which resulted in better
health and avoided more than 160 thousand premature deaths due to air
pollution, as well as less structural damage to the environment. These benefits
to public health and safety have already paid for themselves by outweighing the
cost of factories switching to cleaner production methods by a ratio of 30:1.
Thus governments should not always listen to the people as governments may
need to make unpopular but more informed decisions that benefit the masses.
Furthermore, governments should not always listen to the people but consider
the views of experts since the majority may push for decisions that benefit
themselves in the short-term but end up harming themselves in the long run.
Citizens might not always be able to consider the long-term ramifications of a
decision since imagining the future seems rather abstract and distant. Rather,
they may prefer to pursue instant gratification as these benefits are immediately
tangible, as evidenced by how a 2017 survey of American saving habits by
Bankrate found that 60% of Americans do not have enough funds to cover a
$500 emergency. However, governmental experts are specifically trained to
consider the downstream effect of a policy and how it would impact the lives of
future generations as the government’s duty of care extends to being responsible
for future generations. Hence governments are willing to make trade-offs on
behalf of society that may appear to hurt society in the short run but benefit
them eventually. One such decision was when the Victoria State government in
Australia banned attractive packaging for cigarettes in 2012, which led to an initial
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decrease in revenue for the tobacco industry and tobacco tax, but eventually led
to a 7% reduction in the number of smokers in Victoria. The long-term benefits
to smokers and their families, now that there was less second hand smoke,
would also ease the burden on the state’s healthcare system and would benefit
the state in the long term. Thus governments should not always listen to the
people if it means that governments make unpopular decisions that appear to be
harmful in the short-term but benefit the masses in the long-term.
Lastly, governments should not always listen to the people if they advocate for
decisions that harm the minority and violate the principle of equality. It is vital
that governments ensure equal protection and rights for all human beings,
regardless of race, gender or religion, since everyone deserves to be treated
with a fundamental level of dignity and respect, which is a core foundation of our
democratic system. The shifting nature of a societal majority over time also
means that all citizens wish to be duly heard and respected by the government
even if they are no longer part of the majority. Unfortunately in most societies,
the majority tends to drown out the voices of the minority due to the majority
wielding control over media outlets and public institutions as a result of their
advantage of sheer numbers. Governments must thus be cautious in ensuring
that they do not neglect the views of the minority, because acting on the views
of the people may end up being only the views of the majority. Consequently,
governments must strive towards upholding equality even if it is not what the
people are demanding. For instance in the United States, the Lyndon B. Johnson
Administration pushed through with the 1964 Civil Rights Act to ensure equal
housing, education and rights for African Americans despite the fact that the civil
rights movement never gained approval from the majority of citizens in the 1960s,
because it would be despicable for entire segments of society to be treated as
less than equal. Similarly, Chancellor Angela Merkel pushed for Germany to
accept 1 million refugees in 2015, fulfilling the duty of a developed nation to care
for the most downtrodden in the world, even though it would cost her party a
sizeable number of seats in the 2017 election. Thus governments should not
always listen to the people if listening to the people results in violating
fundamental human rights and equality.
In conclusion, governments should not always listen to the people, but consider
the views of the people in conjunction with the views of experts and minorities
in order to correct for a lack of perfect information and power asymmetries
present in society that would disadvantage the minority. Ideally, governments
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Comments:
Thoughtful, insightful, and balanced response, with a range of apt illustrations providing
effective support. You unpack the question clearly and intelligently from the start,
smoothing the path for your arguments, which were sharp too. Excellent linguistic ability
- clear, succinct, and well organised. Missing "links" at the end of paragraphs though
but this can be easily remedied for future essays.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Soh Ying Qi | 18A01C
Proponents of entirely free and fair democracy often point out that allowing
more input on issues of governance from the general population can serve as a
much-needed check on the power of a government. Given power over fellow
citizens, the argument goes, politicians—even the most responsible ones—are
perennially at risk of succumbing to the flaws inherent in human nature, such as
selfishness and greed, and abuse of power. It is true that rulers of a country can
rarely be fully trusted: even in the most functional of democracies, the image
presented by some elected officials is often a façade, masking the more distasteful
elements of their character. Given this caveat, some would argue that it is vital
for the voice of the people to play a role in ensuring that governments do not
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Secondly, taking the views of its people into account can help a government
improve on existing policies and methods of governance. Every society
encompasses some form of demographic diversity, be it religious, ethnic or
otherwise. It would then stand to reason that not all well-intentioned
government policies will be equally beneficial (or even applicable) to all groups
in society. Obtaining feedback and alternative views on ways to tackle social
issues would enhance the ability of a government to plan and implement schemes
that best serve their intended purposes, being of even greater service to those
they were designed to help. For example, Singapore’s Ministry of Environment
and Water Resources (MEWR) recently conducted a survey of visitors to
neighbourhood parks like the Bishan-Ang Mo Kio Park, collecting data on how
often residents visited the parks and how existing facilities could be improved.
The Ministry of Education (MOE) also conducts regular focus group discussions
with current students to gain insights into the suitability of certain curricula,
among other things. Despite the relatively limited impact of one person’s views
taken in isolation, larger-scale surveys such as these often have implications for
how governments can conduct or fine-tune policies to better serve their people.
The importance of obtaining opinions from the so-called “common folk”
becomes all the more evident when one considers that political officials are often
accused of being removed from the reality of citizens living on the ground—the
experience of being in power undoubtedly brings with it some insularity from
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However, the word “always” carries with it a loaded set of implications. Surely
there must be some instances that justify state decision-making without
consulting citizens—governance, as with many other things, is rarely so black-
and-white or absolute. If one asserts that politicians cannot always be trusted to
do the right thing for their people, then there is certainly also some doubt that
people always make the best decisions. On the surface, it is difficult to justify
forcing a government to cede control of its approach to governance to its
people: average citizens are not all equally equipped to make sound decisions.
Often, people are also susceptible to poor decision-making and might even
require some degree of paternalism from the government, in order to preserve
social welfare. (Granted, the definition of “good” and “bad” decisions is often
subjective, and determining social benefit may not be as clear-cut as many of us
would suggest.) Examples range from a rural district in Estonia that voted to
adopt a cannabis leaf as the symbol in its new flag to issues with more serious
legal implications, like Singapore’s recent ban on 53 piracy websites. Despite
being one of the richest countries in the world with a GDP per capita of almost
US$90,000, Singapore charted in the top 10 offending countries when it came to
online piracy. Given the choice, and the voice, its citizens would most likely have
generated a mound of backlash before the decision was ever made—yet for the
good of content creators both local and overseas, and to curb illegal activity that
was fast becoming rampant, the ban on piracy sites by the Singapore government
arguably would create more social benefits than a decision born of a popular
vote would. While we often cite the perceived clash between democratic values
and paternalistic measures, it is apparent that both can—and do—share a
commitment to the common good of society.
Finally, removing the need for a government to constantly seek its people’s
opinions on various issues enhances its efficiency in solving problems, which
often has positive effects on citizens’ standard of living. Assuming that trust in
government is not misplaced, government policies without popular input may
lead to desirable outcomes in the long run. It is no coincidence that the high
levels of economic growth and development enjoyed by the newly-independent
Southeast Asian states or the East Asian states of South Korea and Taiwan in the
1950-1990s ran concurrently with long periods of authoritarian regimes.
Eliminating the popular vote in issues of national importance arguably generated
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the political stability needed urgently by many states to implement policies for
industrialisation and other economic goals. This feat could likely not have been
accomplished if these states’ respective governments had stopped at every
juncture to solicit the views of the people on moving forward. In this way, they
were able to achieve the immediately pertinent goal of economic development,
without the need to constantly seek public opinion on governance.
In sum, while we may trumpet the abstract notion of “free and fair democracy”
as the vital element in an ideal world, this vision is exactly merely that: an ideal.
In working towards social progress through fair representation of the views of
various groups in society, we cannot lose sight of the reality that unanimous
public approval or even productive national discussion is often simply
unattainable. Given the diversity of viewpoints in a society—and even within
different groups—it is often difficult to chart a course for society that everyone
can agree on. The inherent conflict between the (not always reliable) will of the
people and the responsibilities of a government presents itself always. For if
governments must “always” listen to their people, what then is the point of being
a leader at all?
Comments:
A thoughtful response, with balanced and well-explained examples in most parts of the
essay. A few areas for improvement: essay could have been more explicit in stating
main arguments, and a wider range of global examples could have been provided.
Language-wise, assured control of discourse markers. Good use of felicitous expressions;
strong personal voice.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Caleb Leow Yong Quan | 18A01A
In the social documentary “Don’t Call us Poor”, which was recently aired on
Channel News Asia, Singaporean viewers were given an insider’s perspective
into poverty in Singapore. Rather than following the usual meritocratic narrative
where poverty is equated with personal failure, laziness, or the result of poor
financial decisions, the poor in Singapore were cast as an incredibly
heterogeneous group, each facing a series of complex problems arising from
other factors like their family background, ethnicity, or the lack of negotiating
power in the workplace. All of these point to the fact that while some instances
of poverty are the result of personal failure, poverty is fundamentally a structural
issue, and cannot be understood without examining the interaction between
government policies, identity markers, and the self-perpetuating nature of
poverty.
First, let us examine why it is a common belief among Singaporeans that poverty
is a result of personal failure. Poverty is often only portrayed as the consequence
of poor financial choices and a lack of positive traits such as hard work or the
ability to delay gratification. This narrative arises due to the meritocratic nature
of Singapore, where supposedly the system is fair and where equality is codified
in our laws, thus with an equal starting point those who succeed in life do so by
their own merit while those who do not are depicted as lazy and incompetent.
Fundamentally, this narrative continues to exist because the majority of middle-
class Singaporeans who are relatively affluent and who lead comfortable lives
want to believe that they, in some way or another, deserve their wealth, and as
a result systemic biases which may have helped them get towards their position
in life are often wilfully neglected. In an ideal and fair meritocratic system, poverty
would only be viewed as the result of personal failure.
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Even those who acknowledge that poverty is a vicious cycle may still believe that
the self-perpetuating nature of deprivation stems from personal failings. For
example, in sociologist Teo You Yenn’s recently published “This is What
Inequality Looks Like”, she points out that many Singaporeans believe that the
poor remain poor because they choose to do so, and do not want to adopt the
values and traits necessary to break out of the poverty cycle. She mentions that
while visiting the poor during the process of her research, many other
Singaporeans she was with were quick to point out that many supposedly “poor”
households had extravagantly large flat screen televisions. This made the other
observers conclude that the poor were unable to invest in what would bring
them greater returns in the long run, prioritising instead instant gratification such
as spending huge sums of money on entertainment. According to this same
theory that posits that the poor have a “deficit” in values, some may also believe
that poverty spills over from generation to generation because parents pass on
the same traits of profligacy and laziness to their children, meaning poverty
always originates from an individual level, for example from one’s failure as a
parent.
Finally, the most insidious narrative about meritocracy and poverty in Singapore
is that the system is fair simply because a small percentage of the poor have
managed to break out of poverty, the idea being that this same trajectory can be
replicated by anyone if that individual puts in enough hard work. During the
Prime Minister’s National Day Rally speech every year, PM Lee never fails to
mention inspiring stories of those who, despite being disadvantaged due to their
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age or family background, through sheer grit have risen above their
circumstances to attain success in life. These individuals are worthy of our
admiration, but they are not representative of most of the poor in Singapore and
their stories should not overshadow the other forces which produce poverty.
Why then does the government keep propagating such a flawed narrative of
meritocracy where poverty is solely seen as the result of personal failure? First,
as previously mentioned, it makes the society that the PAP has engineered seem
like a fair and justifiable one. Yet, another reason we must consider is that our
individual narratives as citizens are inextricably linked to national narratives. The
story of Singapore being transformed from a fishing village to a bustling
metropolitan city is based on the idea that the government through careful
planning and relentless hard work, brought our country from rags to riches. In
the same vein, in our own personal capacities, it seems that the same values of
hard work and competence are the only way for us to lay claims to our justified
personal successes.
Now, we will consider the flaws in this meritocratic narrative by looking at the
other forces which produce poverty. We can ask three questions: The
Singaporean system may seem officially fair, but what systemic biases are hidden
from our sight? Are the “poor” a homogeneous group or are the experiences of
each individual also shaped by other identity markers? Is the fact that choices
made by the poor are characterised as “failure” problematic in itself since it
reveals that our society unfairly values some traits more than others?
First, poverty is not always the result of personal failure because poverty is
fundamentally structural. The fact is that the comfortable lives that most
Singaporeans lead are premised upon a darker reality in Singapore - one in which
construction workers strenuously toil day and night and domestic helpers stand
in for the very Singaporean women who work outside of home because they can
enjoy better forms of employment. It is a bleak truth we must accept that behind
the façade of a shining city upon a hill, Singapore is highly dependent on a
subservient and poor working force. The only reason why these “poor” sectors
are hardly inscribed in our national consciousness is that the government
systematically excludes the poor from the public sphere, for example through
constructing dormitories for construction workers which are geographically
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Finally, poverty is not always a result of “personal failure” because the concept
of “failure” itself is subjective and perhaps signals the way in which society unfairly
remunerates certain values or traits over others. Ultimately, Singapore still
seems to glorify quantifiable markers of success like the PISA test scores of
Singaporean students or the productivity of Singaporean workers. What about
other values which may be more salient among the poor? Teo points out, for
example, that the poor community she observed tended to be more generous
in helping one another, and kids as young as six could take care of siblings,
demonstrating a sense of responsibility we would perhaps be less likely to find
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In conclusion, the claim that poverty is always the result of personal failure is an
extremely reductive view of the issue. Granted, poverty is sometimes the result
of sloth, profligacy or poor personal choices, just as how affluence can also be
the result of an individual’s hard work and frugality. However, to assert that
every single Singaporean is somehow proportionally rewarded or punished for
personal successes and failures is to place too much autonomy in the hands of
each individual in determining their position in life. We must always remember
that the autonomy of each individual is always circumscribed by larger social and
political forces, especially when it comes to socioeconomic status which is a
complex product of many factors beyond an individual’s control. I argue thus
that poverty is fundamentally a structural issue, which is in turn sharpened by
cultural factors. In an ideal and just world, poverty would only be a result of
personal failure, but looking past this flawed but deeply engrained narrative of
meritocracy, the government must enact more inclusive policies and employers
must be more sensitive to the struggles of the poor while we as a society must
constantly question our definitions of “success” and “failure”.
Comments:
A long response but a thoroughly captivating read! You cover quite a range of pertinent
issues with considerable insight + balance (+sensitivity - though your claims do get more
extreme in the last quarter or so), and with admirable depth of discussion in the majority
of assertions. Only the “TAFEP/Working issues” point was shaky in relevance. Very well
done!
A smooth read throughout showing superb organisation of ideas. Vocabulary and
sentence structure also show range/variation, and a strong voice with considerable
conviction came through.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test Jonah Tan Sheen | 18A01A
Singapore is the most expensive city in the world. Measured in terms of per
capita GDP, its citizens enjoy wealth more than double that of an average
American citizen, and rank amongst the coveted Scandinavian countries. The city
is a metropolis, with clusters of high-rise buildings overlooking the horizon. A
dispassionate observer might then ask: “Where are the poor?” Or more
accurately, “Why are there still poor people in a country that has prided itself
on an ‘iron will’, as Mr Lee Kuan Yew put it, to lift itself out of third world status
independently in fifty years? While some might argue that in Singapore – a
country built on meritocracy – comprises only people who are poor because of
sloth and neglect, I instead argue that while poverty may be a result of personal
failure, it is never the sole factor behind it due to a host of environmental and
structural obstacles.
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In reality, however, meritocracy has very real imperfections with equally real
implications: if the fundamental argument is that meritocracy removes all
variables and impediments to success except for agency, then the failure of
meritocracy will mean that other factors beyond agency can impact a person’s
financial situation, lessening the degree of personal responsibility for a state of
poverty. While meritocracy at its initial stages might have worked where income
differentials were largely non-existent in the 1960s, the initial success of
meritocracy in fostering different outcomes ironically led to its increasing failure
across generations as each generation of successful individuals naturally pass on
their material and non-material advantages to subsequent generations, who then
work to utilise their inherited wealth to further increase their chances for
success, and so on. The eventual result is an acute and chronic situation of
income and wealth inequality, shaping the original system of “meritocracy” into
one of “parentocracy”, as coined by sociologist Teo Yeo Yenn. Children of poor
parents then find themselves unable to afford perks like tuition, or even spare
cash for assessment books, or money for adequate nutrition – all of which
directly disadvantage them vis-à-vis their richer peers. When opportunities are
no longer equal, merit-based rewards and assistance then fundamentally lose
their importance for what use is rewarding poor students in the top 25% of their
cohort with a cash prize when there is no one to receive it because they lack
the means to focus on schoolwork? Across generations, then, it can be argued
that in reality, poverty becomes less and less of a personal failure as the
institutionalisation of their disadvantages stacks heavier and heavier cards against
them.
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make markedly worse choices, thereby entrenching their state of poverty. This
phenomenon is made especially clear in Singapore, where the abovementioned
institutionalisation of poverty has led to the creation of both physical and mental
barriers faced by the poor. While the government consistently prides itself on
its efforts in ensuring a strict quota of occupants of certain races in HDB flats to
ensure diversity, no such “social mixing” scheme has been implemented across
class lines. In fact, where families are the most poor, they do not even inhabit
regular HDB blocks with the possibility of mingling with others of different
backgrounds and wealth, but are instead segregated into cheaper but usually
isolated rental flats, usually in separate neighbourhoods altogether. This is
significant because one’s living environment drastically shapes the trajectory one
can take in life, especially in the formative years. Where parents work long hours
and are constantly absent out of necessity, a child at home can have no adult to
turn to as he might be able to do in a different neighbourhood where some might
have the luxury of staying at home because families in his proximity experience
from the same problem. It is then easy to extrapolate how this initial parental
neglect can lead him to surround himself with poor company that might incline
him towards damaging life choices like the use of drugs, simply because there is
no one who might advise him to the contrary. The existence and subsequent
reinforcement of poor living conditions has severe consequences on a child’s
physical and mental health. In the book “Utopia for Realists”, the historian Rutger
Bregman outlines findings from a study that suggests that being in an environment
of neglect and high stress borne out of the need to fulfil basic requirements like
adequate food and psychological support can breed “tunnel vision” in decision
making and leave the individual in a state where his IQ is reduced by 14 points,
the equivalent of attempting cognitive activity on 24 hours of no sleep. As long
as the government continues to physically segregate and entrench the living
conditions of the poor, no amount of academic assistance to lead them out of
poverty will be effective so long as environmental intervention is lacking.
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20% moved to the top quintile over a span of thirty years. Just as success can be
a result of personal effort, then, so too can personal failure contribute to poverty.
Yet we must acknowledge that barriers besides those borne out of the mind are
a reality, and do prevent a level of social mobility that would be far more
desirable.
If a dispassionate observer then asks you – “Why are there still poor people in
Singapore?” I hope the answer will now be – “because sometimes an ‘iron will’
is not enough”.
Comments:
A thoughtful, largely well-argued response, showing good sensitivity to the question and
the struggles of the poor – barring the odd blip, which does not seem callous or intended.
There is also effort at achieving balance, though penultimate paragraph was rushed
(but do, after receiving this, develop it fully for your practice). If there’s one gap, it’s the
lack of consideration of factors beyond the “education” years – some deeper
consideration of adult issues was much needed.
Excellent linguistic ability – crisp expression; range of words; varied sentence structures;
strong personal voice, enhancing communication of view. Organisation of ideas is also
strong. A more developed conclusion would have sealed an all-round well-controlled
response.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Sng Hong | 18A01C
“Singapore aims to provide every individual with the means to realise their full
potential” trumpeted Minister for Trade and Industry Chan Chun Sing in a
dialogue regarding inequality in Singapore with Mediacorp’s Channel 8 News.
Just 53 years into its history, Singapore has evolved into one of the most affluent
societies in the world, with a median household income of $9000 in 2017
(Singstat, Department of Statistics). Despite Singapore’s economic prosperity,
relative poverty still exists in the form of income inequality, as some struggle to
make ends meet in a city with a cost of living second only to Tokyo. Theoretically,
the income disparity between people may be seen to be an outcome of an
individual lack of ability or resilience, given that Singapore boasts the systemic
foundation for equal economic opportunity (in its practice of meritocracy) and
the infrastructural support available to help its people escape the poverty cycle.
However, I believe that may not hold true in reality due to social phenomena
such as pedagogical inequality and social stigma towards certain groups in society,
which create a ‘glass ceiling’ in society no matter how hard individuals themselves
may work, showing that the root cause of sustained relative poverty may be
societal rather than personal.
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point and that there is a fair and level playing field, poverty, or the lack of financial
success, would reflect one’s lack of capability. Even in employment, employers
seek those with a stellar academic record, in the form of good grades (or the
number of A’s), which are used as a criterion for judging a person’s value. By this
logic, since individual ability is thought to be the deciding factor in life, it may
seem that failure, in the form of relative poverty – not doing as well as others
financially – and the inability to escape it, may be the result of a person’s own
lack of ability.
Furthermore, some may argue that even for those of ‘lower ability’, the relevant
infrastructure and support available still create a good chance to succeed
financially and escape poverty, and thus the income disparity amongst
Singaporeans is often regarded as due to other ‘personal failures’ such as laziness.
Minister for Law K Shanmugam noted in a Facebook post that even those seen
to be late-bloomers will “eventually get there” due to Singapore’s provision
relevant infrastructural support, such as vocational schools like the ITE and
schools for children with special needs that train them to have a skillset for
securing employment. This means that those with lower academic ability and
those with special needs are also given a chance to gain employment and prosper
financially, reducing the income gap. In this sense, anyone who is still unable to
rise out of poverty despite ample government support available may be viewed
as simply being “too lazy” or “not hardworking enough” to succeed in our
demanding and competitive society.
In reality, however, the presence of pedagogical inequality due to the income gap
may greatly limit the economic outcomes of individuals, even if they are
extremely capable and hardworking, and thus it may not be true that poverty is
a direct result of individual flaws. Pedagogical inequality – the difference in the
quality of education available or accessible to different groups of people in society
– can potentially stifle one’s progress in society, creating a ‘glass ceiling’ on one’s
career achievement and earnings. According to Fareed Zakaria, columnist at The
Washington Post, employers desire applicants who possess “critical thinking
skills”. Yet, renowned academic and sociologist Teo You Yenn asserts that in
Singapore, “critical thinking” is something that is only fostered in a limited way
in the form of examinations for most mainstream schools, while some ‘elite’
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primary schools may inculcate it in their students throughout the school term.
What this means is that a student’s ability to think critically is no longer a
measure of his or her own merit but a by-product of the education that he or
she has received. By this logic, those whose families cannot afford to send them
to ‘elite’ schools – schools that are famous for their education yet infamously
expensive or hard to get into, such as Nanyang Primary School – find themselves
handicapped, not by ‘personal failure’ but by a lack of financial resources or social
influence. In addition, the increasingly exorbitant tuition industry in Singapore
also reflects this suffocating ‘glass ceiling’ on financially poorer students. Tuition
agencies such as The Learning Lab claim to improve a student’s grades, but they
charge sky-high fees that make them inaccessible to a majority of the population.
The lack of access to higher quality education may result in candidates not
performing as well as or being regarded as a less capable employee compared
others who have access to it, rendering them unable to genuinely access higher-
paying jobs or move up the social or corporate ladder as quickly. In consequence,
the poor in Singapore may find it exasperatingly difficult to escape poverty or to
greatly improve their socioeconomic status, not as a result of their own lack of
ability but due to how pedagogical inequality has handicapped their careers.
Therefore, persistent relative poverty and the inability to end the poverty cycle
may not be caused solely by an individual’s lack of merit, but rather may be
created and sustained by social phenomena such as pedagogical inequality that
greatly disadvantages the less well-off in Singapore.
In addition, social stigma towards certain groups of people in society also inhibits
their career prospects, rendering it much more difficult for them to succeed
financially or close the income gap, and thus it may be largely untrue that relative
poverty is a result of their own lack of ability. For example, ex-convicts in
Singapore may find it a Sisyphean task to re-enter the workforce and seek re-
employment, due to prevailing social perceptions that they may be dangerous or
even likely to steal from their employers. Even though this is a myopic mindset
not backed up by any relevant data, non-governmental organisations such as the
Yellow Ribbon project still say that it remains extremely difficult for ex-convicts
to find new jobs. Businesses that hire ex-convicts, such as Eighteen Chefs, are
the exception rather than the norm. Similarly, those with disabilities may find it
an insurmountable challenge to seek employment, especially in the higher-paying
jobs such as in businesses or law, even though their physical impediments may
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have nothing to do with the nature of the job. For instance, those who have
difficulty walking or are wheelchair-bound may be denied an accounting job.
Social discrimination against certain groups of people in society may make it
near-impossible for them to achieve even vaguely similar levels of financial
success or economic prosperity to the rest of the populace, and this may have
nothing to do with their individual ability. Thus, relative poverty and income
inequality may not be a result of one’s own lack of ability or laziness, but rather
possibly caused by unfair treatment of certain groups in society.
Comments:
Good effort. You are on the right track. Your point on meritocracy is good because you
have provided a macro-view of the arguments.
However, do think about the grounds on which who gets what in Singapore. Also
consider people’s mindsets to the problem of poverty in Singapore. While that is your
penultimate paragraph, you need to consider implications on welfare and subsidies in
the long-term. How does this mindset further entrench poverty and limit the reach of
the policies? Finally, think about how you could have better characterized Singapore.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Kaitlyn Ng Ke Yi | 18S06G
Take a walk in a few cities in Africa today, and you may not even believe that
this is one of the poorest continents in the world - or that most of the African
population do not speak Chinese. Well-paved roads stretch for miles, and the
urban African landscape is dotted with Chinese architecture, Chinese schools
and Chinese shopping malls. Such a scene raises the question: does the provision
of financial and material aid to countries in need, in this instance from China to
Africa, do more harm than good? Traditionally, the path to prosperity of
developing countries invariably requires the intervention of a wealthier country
to provide financial and material resources. While financial and material aid is a
direct way of bolstering the economy of a country in need and raising living
standards, it carries with it a host of other issues: risk of exploitation, over-
reliance on aid as an unsustainable source of national income, and infringement
on a nation’s sovereignty. In light of the severity of such consequences, typical
financial and material aid given to countries in need may bring more harm than
good.
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economy. For instance, foreign aid provided to the Philippines after hurricane
and tsunami disasters by richer countries in both Southeast Asia and around the
world play a large role in ensuring the recovery of Philippines’ economy, and
vaccination aid for smallpox in South America, Africa and Asia helped to contain
the spread of the disease, such that it was eliminated in 1980. In these situations,
aid has helped countries in need get back on their own two feet and work
towards a higher standard of living for the people. However, direct provision of
financial and material aid cannot be used to solve deep-rooted problems like
poverty and corruption, and in such cases, long-term provision of aid can in turn
breed reliance and do more harm than good. For instance, while Angola receives
a large amount of financial and material aid every year, it still remains one of the
most impoverished nations in the world. Donations constitute the largest
proportion of their gross domestic product, such that there was little incentive
for the government to engage in fiscal and economic reforms to finance their
own sending. As direct provisions of aid do not deepen capital, improve
infrastructure or promote education, much of the population remains trapped
in a poverty cycle, reliant on cash and material handouts to survive without a
means to work. The situation is exacerbated by a corrupt government that
usurps much of the financial aid provided, and many foreign countries like the
US, seeing the futility of aid provision, have begun to tighten their budgets and
draw out of such direct transfers. Hence, it can be seen that in the long run,
direct provision of financial and material aid can bring more harm than good.
Not only are the impacts of aid a major consideration, so can the intention of
aid provision impact the net harm or benefit of aid. Financial aid provided to
countries in need by other richer countries and large organisations could
compromise a nation’s sovereignty, thus bringing greater harm than good despite
the economic progress it can bring. Large investments in a developing country’s
infrastructure by large corporations and countries often carry their own political
agenda. The recipient countries, having been greatly helped by the ‘generosity’
of their benefactors, are hence greatly obliged towards their political views.
Hence, these developing countries are exploited as bargaining chips on the global
playing field by the superpowers, and failure to cooperate with the political
agendas of donor countries could cut these developing countries off from a
steady investment flow on which they rely, as well as important trade relations,
spelling certain doom for the country’s economy. The sovereignty of the country
in need is hence compromised, and the country’s leaders will be unable to place
national interests first in making important political decisions, which ultimately
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brings long-term harm to the citizens. For instance, while extensive Chinese
investment in Cambodia has greatly improved access to education, efficiency of
production and overall standard of living in the country, Cambodia has risked
regional cooperation with ASEAN countries in siding with China’s agenda on the
South China Sea dispute. In 2016, Cambodia opposed the proposed wording in
an ASEAN foreign ministers’ communique that alluded to the Permanent Court
of Arbitration’s ruling that China has no legal basis to exert its nine-dash-line
claim to the bulk of the South China Sea. By standing on China’s side regarding
the South China Sea dispute, Cambodia risks potential alienation from other
ASEAN countries, the US and Japan, which may undermine its long term
economic and political interests. . Reliance on financial and material aid could
hence compromise on the national sovereignty of the country in need, a key
political infringement that cannot be offset by the economic benefits of the
financial and material aid provided.
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However, all this doom and gloom undermines the positive work that many non-
profit organisations have done to help these countries in need. Provision of
financial and material aid to countries in need can, in the long-term, bring more
benefit than harm when the aid provided is well-placed, well-intended, with a
consideration for future sustainability. A shining model of such success will
definitely be the Gates Foundation. The Gates Foundation aims to provide
financial and material aid, mostly medical, to developing countries to promote
education and industrialisation, enabling the poor to escape poverty with their
own means and ensuring the sustainability of a country’s economy. By providing
financial aid in the form of financing infrastructure and education efforts in
African countries, the Gates Foundation has managed to not only increase the
literacy of children in poverty, but also empowered mothers to improve their
own standard of living by practising family planning, ensuring nutrition of the
children and speaking up on women’s rights. Without an ulterior motive other
than to help these countries, philanthropists and non-profit organisations have
come a long way in empowering women and breaking the poverty cycle – a
social enterprise has even trained women to be solar power engineers in rural
Vietnam communities, bringing energy to these villages that is a crucial first step
to development. While such efforts may be expensive with no real benefit to the
donor groups, aid rendered with the intention to help countries in need is a first
step towards economic reform and self-sufficiency, and thus can bring more
good than harm.
So, ultimately, does the provision of financial and material aid bring more benefit
or more harm? The answer lies in the motives of donors and the appropriateness
of the timing and form of aid provided to recipient countries. While in today’s
world, the vast majority of financial and material aid provision seems to be more
of a bane than a boon to developing countries, we can anticipate a day where
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the right aid, given at the right time, can lift these countries out of poverty and
provide a better living standard for all. We are only as strong as our weakest
link, so let us, as a global community, work to strengthen the human chain.
Comments:
Your essay grew in strength as it progressed; arguments and explanations were
generally sound. In all, you managed to sustain focus on the “more...than” assertion,
also providing breadth of discussion (e.g. short-term vs. long-term, nations vs. individual
assessment) with well-developed illustration. A very good response!
Excellent all-round linguistic ability. Good range of vocabulary and sentence structure;
crisp expression, good and apt inflexions. Organisation or flow of ideas was occasionally
confusing, but overall the essay developed logically and effectively.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Valeska Tan Ying Lin | 18S03F
“Cannot you see… that we are dying?” – E. M. Forster’s chilling narrative, titled
“The Machine Stops”, written in 1909, is a highly perturbing prediction of the
modern society. Set in a dystopian future, the main characters live and breathe
in a machine. “The Machine develops – but not on our lies. The machine
proceeds – but not to our goal,” a character argues, positing that the self-aware
Machine numbs humans’ sense of space and sense of touch, limits human
interaction, reduces love to a carnal act, and compels them to worship it. The
dystopian setting is highly dramatised, but the effects of technology seem to ring
true in our world right now. Some believe that artificial intelligence should be
embraced as a tool to lead mankind toward a prosperous future, and that it
warrants no anxiety, but that is merely a superficial and highly optimistic outlook.
Considering the rapid pace of advancement in the field of artificial intelligence
and its uses in the wrong hands, its likelihood to replace jobs of many worldwide
and its evident lack of morals and human nature, it would be a huge mistake to
not be wary of this form of technology.
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that the progress made has yet to be seen as truly worrying. As much of this
technology is still undergoing research, mistakes are made, as seen from the
many failures self-driving vehicles have made, proving that artificial intelligence is
not yet ready or overly dangerous. Hence, being wary of it is not entirely
necessary at this point in time.
That being said, advancements in artificial intelligence are happening much faster,
given recent breakthroughs, and can lead to very worrying security issues,
especially if allowed in trigger-happy hands. One of the major features of artificial
intelligence is its wide reach. When gathering data, it is likely to be able to obtain
information from large pools of data. This feature is currently being used in the
widest surveillance network in the world – China. This facial recognition
technology is built using artificial intelligence, and has the ability to track people
down in a matter of minutes. A British Broadcasting Corporation (BBC) reporter,
who was flagged for arrest, was caught a mere seven minutes after leaving the
airport. A man who was wanted for “economic crimes” was arrested while
attending pop star Jacky Cheung’s concert amongst 60,000 other fans. While this
facial recognition technology may seem like a huge plus for law enforcement
agencies, which can use a simple dragnet to narrow down their scope to find
their target, the other uses of this technology are far more sinister. Due to
inherent social biases and social prejudices in the programmers who create the
algorithm, there might be inaccuracies in the technology used. Law enforcement
agencies that have applied this technology in America found that the likelihood
of identifying an African-American as a suspect was higher than that of a
Caucasian person as the artificial intelligence had “learnt” more mugshots of
African-American offenders than Caucasian ones. Some students at Stanford also
created a “gaydar” algorithm last year, intending to use artificial intelligence to
identify non-heterosexual individuals. The criteria were naturally based off of
their own biased views, showing how easy it is to influence an algorithm that
controls artificial intelligence. As more and more people can use open-source
options to develop their own neural network of artificial intelligence, this may
cause more harm than good. Therefore, we should be wary of artificial
intelligence as it is developing faster than we think, and can be used by many
worldwide for the wrong reasons.
Artificial intelligence also has the potential to steal our livelihood in the coming
years, simply because they are more efficient, making this trend unsettling as
mankind has to worry about being replaced by machines. As members of society,
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having a job is fundamental and having that taken away by artificial intelligence is
definitely a cause for concern. As of 2013, Mount Elizabeth Hospital in Singapore
has conducted over 7000 robot-assisted surgeries and there are many more of
such inventions being created. Eventually, as these robots are equipped with
artificial intelligence, they may be able to replace surgeons entirely due to their
higher precision and efficiency rate. Not to mention, robo-trucks are becoming
increasingly popular as well. These trucks are meant for long distance, overnight
trips to transport goods all over America. This is a more sought-after option by
many delivery companies as this means that the trucks can continue driving non-
stop, taking less time. Not only does this rid truck drivers of their jobs, it also
spells bad business for many rest-stop joints. America has many of these towns
that act as rest stops for drivers that pass by and making a living from it.
Removing their source of income and culture is a huge downside to these
residents. Clearly, artificial intelligence is likely to rid many people of their
professions in the near future, which is a huge worry to those who are already
living in competitive job-seeking environments. Hence, we should be wary of
using too much artificial intelligence.
The lack of ethics and humanity in the nature of artificial intelligence is perhaps
the biggest reason as to why we have to be wary of it. Just this week, it was
reported that many Google employees were quitting the company, citing the
defence technology as their reason. As programmers, they were tasked with
equipping drones with artificial intelligence algorithms that could shoot down
suspicious people if necessary. But if an innocent civilian were to be harmed in
the process, herein lies the question – who takes the blame? The same goes for
self-driving cars, whose programmers have to struggle with never-ending
permutations of possible accidents, all of which require the algorithm to
prioritise a life over another. Does the machine make the decision or the
programmer? Since there is no real accountability for these situations, such as
Tesla’s self-driving car crash a few years ago and a recent one earlier this year,
it raises a moral issue that cannot be solved. Furthermore, artificial intelligence
is, after all, artificial. It may be based on the neural system of the brain, but it
makes the humanity the brain has. Partially inspired by science-fiction television
series, ‘Black Mirror’, the Luka chat bot allows users to “talk” to the deceased,
which is a digital, artificial intelligence representation, based on the deceased
social media profile, texts and photo albums. As if this were not creepy enough,
a South Korean start-up aims to use virtual reality and artificial intelligence to
recreate a hologram of the deceased that talks and acts normally. Just like that
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episode of ‘Black Mirror’, however, this raises the question of authenticity and
humanity. The replica may be a clone of the deceased, but it will not be able to
copy the miniscule facial movements and nuances in tone the person may have
adopted when alive. These inventions lack the warmth of human interaction,
which is something all humans need. The Uncanny Valley, a theory proposed by
a Japanese professor, posits that there is a certain threshold that humans have
when accepting something artificial as real. This applies to many artificial
intelligence robots in the market right now. Be it Sophia, the hyper-realistic
robot, Peppa the Japanese robot monk who can conduct funerals, or Google
Duplex, the human-sounding artificial intelligence personal assistant, these
technologies, despite their amazing efficiency and creativity, all lack a very
important concept – humanity. To allow artificial intelligence to take the place
of humans as receptionists, monks, nurses and personal assistants is akin to
removing our facilities for communication. We, as social beings, need to be wary
of artificial intelligence, as the more it progresses without ethical guidelines, the
more it limits our interaction with each other.
Artificial intelligence may have its benefits, but the pace at which it is developing
is more than man can take. We should be wary of artificial intelligence, as the
more it progresses, the more likely it may be used for the wrong purposes, or
used as a replacement of jobs, as well as limits the human interactions that we
have today. But by all means, the advancements in this field should continue,
provided that it is under proper regulation and strict ethical guidelines. Artificial
intelligence, when used effectively as a tool, can go a long way in boosting
humanity’s progress in science.
Comments:
A thoughtful response showing a balanced discussion and clear awareness of the issue
in the question. Apt and quite wide-ranging use of illustrations, which are used to
support ideas effectively. Clearly a fully relevant essay, demonstrating good and
contemporary knowledge of the subject matter.
Very good linguistic ability. Use of felicitous expression and apt vocab. Assured and
confident throughout. Very few errors and ideas are generally communicated in a cogent
manner, with some degree of personal voice. Intro is effective, using a relevant lead-in
and establishing engagement with the topic. Overall, enjoyed reading the essay!
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 Ashley Teo Jia Yee | 18S03S
In a world where information is made up, can the media still be relied
upon to convey the truth?
It would have been a nice and peaceful day for the customers in a quaint pizzeria
in Washington D.C if not for the subsequent terror that unfolded. An enraged
middle-aged man stormed into the pizzeria and opened shots on everyone,
injuring a few in the process. This unfortunate incident, dubbed the “Pizzagate”
incident shocked countries worldwide, for the very man had been informed by
dubious alt-right news group that allegedly claimed that the Pizzeria was a guise
for Hillary Clinton’s covert sex ring that was trafficking young and innocent
children. Given how false information can lead to extremely real and terrifying
consequences, the media seems unworthy of any trust in today’s world as it
perpetuates false information. While media conglomerates and honchos proudly
claim that the media can still fulfil its role of being an objective purveyor of the
truth, governments and activists caution otherwise. This is understandably so, as
absence of rigorous fact-checking due to the need for profit, compounded by
the immediate pace fake news is churned out, it would be better if we take a
more cautionary approach towards the media.
Admittedly, journalists and certain media behemoths will still vehemently posit
that the media can still provide truthful and grounded insights for there is still
fact-checking systems and protocols that guide the reportage of news and
information. These journalists point to the fact that they still require multiple
sources to confirm the information received before disseminating it. This is
especially true for traditional media outlets such as hardcopy newspapers that
often undergo rigorous and thorough fact-checking procedures before they
publish such information. In fact, the world is still replete with examples of
publishing companies that have been able to maintain their integrity and remain
as an objective and impartial provider of truth, even as some companies turn to
fabricating such information. Newspaper corporations such as the Straits Times
in Singapore to BBC and The New York Times in the United Kingdom and
United States respectively still prove to be credible news sites that people can
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rely on. Furthermore, pundits also point to investigative journalism, where their
main motive is to expose misdeeds and rampant corruption, thereby keeping
other ‘estates of the realm’ reliable. Indeed, there is still a traditional recurrent
motif of the “crusading press’ that is expected to stay on hot-button issues and
misdeeds like dog on a bone. The Joseph Pulitzer Prize for Journalistic excellence,
for instance, has awarded journalist for the past four years on their bravery in
exposing political malfeasance and providing the public with genuine facts. As
such, the media still can be relied on even in a world where rampant
disinformation proliferates quickly.
However, such instances of true and genuine journalistic rigour are the
exceptions, not the rule. Unfortunately, as false information spreads
indiscriminately across the Internet, many newsrooms around the world have
also felt mounting pressures to ‘publish first or perish’. Indeed, as fake news
consistently bombards the internet, other news provider also eliminate rigorous
fact-checking procedures as the process of fact-checking is not only time
consuming, but does not pay off well financially as publishing first guarantees
more profits. Ultimately, media outlets around the world have one goal in mind:
maximise profits and stakeholder share. As a result, the profit imperative
compounded by the salient problem of human avarice means that there are
increased instances of salacious reporting and where news published is less
factual and genuine. The infamous Brock Turner case, where a white male from
Stanford (Ivy League School) allegedly raped a girl made the headlines almost
immediately when vitriol started spreading across the Internet. It was soon
revealed that no incriminating evidence could be found against Brock Turner1,
but the general public had already been greatly incensed over the issue, As news
outlets around the globe compete with the fast speed in which fictitious news is
churned out, the unfortunate reality is that, even the most trustworthy of media
outlets may eventually succumb to eliminating the process of fact-checking and
prioritise profits instead. In fact, fake news may be even more lucrative than
actual news. A small town in Balkans called Veles has been accused of peddling
fictitious stories, with the creators of such fake news, namely youths earning up
to £1,500 a month. Therefore, we cannot depend on the media to fulfil its role
as a honest provider of truth.
1
While the central ideas in this paragraph are sound, the evidence presented is inaccurate. Not only
was there eyewitness evidence of Turner’s assault, prosecutors also had access to photographs and
text messages that incriminated Turner.
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Additionally, the media can no longer be relied upon due to the wilful sharing of
disinformation that results in extremely severe ramifications that makes it more
difficult to regulate. Indeed, the democratisation of the media has meant that
every individual is not only a consumer but also a producer of news.
Consequently, the regulation of information online is more difficult now more
than ever. This is especially so for more liberal countries, that view censorship
as a form of infringement on personal privacy and rights. In countries like the
United States, the United Kingdom and France, censorship is viewed as a tool
used by authoritarian governments with oligarchic interest that seek to
potentially undermine the basis of a well-functioning democracy. As news online
becomes increasingly difficult to regulate, this engenders serious implications
when fabricated information cannot be discerned by the public. The Pizzagate
incident mentioned earlier as well as malicious and fake news during the
American election period are a testament to the state of media in today’s world.
The recent incident in Germany where news of an immigrant raping a girl (Lisa
F) in Germany also sparked widespread protest and flash points as the far-right
used such an incident to fuel anti-immigrant sentiment. While it was later
discovered to be fabricated, the ramifications had already caused widespread
panic and even hate. Therefore, in a time where countries find it increasingly
tough to regulate and police perpetrators of fake news, the media cannot be
relied upon to convey the truth for what is false or genuine have become even
more indiscernible.
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articles expressing dissent, thereby alluding to how the media cannot be relied
on to tell the truth for malicious governments can utilise the media as a mouth
piece and fabricate information too. Also, while large media behemoths have not
vowed political allegiance to any political party, powerful media barons like
Ruppert Murdoch, Jeff Zucker and Michael Bloomberg have long been accused
of publishing certain facts while obscuring and concealing others to forward their
own political agenda. As such, it is evident that in a world where fabricating
information is so simple and quick, many hawkish politician, governments and
corporations use the media to fuel graft and influence political leanings. Thus, the
media cannot be relied upon to be politically agnostic and hold those in power
accountable as well as present objective facts.
Lastly, the media cannot fulfil its promise of being an honest provider of truth as
it traffics heavily in stereotypes that result in the misinterpretation and
objectification of certain minority groups. Sadly, news outlets has started pander
to the basest instinct and provide biased and even false information owning to
the fact that news can be made up easily. As consumers demand to be titillated
and entertained, news outlets serve up articles that are extremely emotionally-
driven, hyperbolic and over-the-top. This results in the creation of more lurid
fare that invariably elbows aside weightier issues that are considered ‘staid’.
Media trends that are insipid often permeate the Internet and this results in the
proliferation of information that is misguided and far from objective. Silvio
Berlusconi’s media empire, Mediaset, constantly features Showgirls that pepper
even the most ordinary shows. His satirical news programme ‘Strip the News’
further exacerbates the idea of Italian females as, first and foremost, sex objects
rather than professional equals. This ‘fetishisation’ that is widespread in the
media stems from the ease of creating information, truthful or not, that invariably
influences the mind-set of the general public by its sheer ubiquity. Thus, the
wiser option would be to take such information with a pinch of salt, as we cannot
trust the media completely.2
In conclusion, while the media used to be a beacon of hope for many due to its
ability to be providers of truthful and grounded insights, the media has
unfortunately abdicated its responsibility in doing so. Perhaps, it is time for
consumers to rely less on the media, but more on themselves in discerning the
2
This paragraph is somewhat less relevant to the question than your previous ones; the
promulgation of stereotypes is not the same as “making up information”.
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Comments:
Sustained clarity with details that are relevant to argument. Some examples are original,
but some need more clarification to link to the point.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Class Essay Assignment Catherine Liew Hui En | 18S03L
Throughout human history, people have sought to record their stories and life
experiences and pass them on to their descendants. Motives behind this vary,
from teaching their future generations important principles, to maintaining a
sense of identity, and even to ensuring their version of things persists for one
reason or another. So it is with history on a larger scale, the kind taught in
schools and debated on by academics. Those who see this history as nothing
more than falsehoods are jaded and cynical, not necessarily through any fault of
their own, but simply due to the tendency for people to favour their own
perspective and seek others’ agreement. However, not only is asserting history
to be ‘only made up on life’ disrespectful of the work of countless historians,
investigative journalists and the like, this absolute view also undermines the
power of history to affect the future in positive ways. As a result, I largely
disagree with the assertion.
One can, of course, understand why some would see historical narratives as lies.
Fabrications do exist that serve to further the purposes of some groups at the
expense of others. Take for example the recent local hot topic: the debate on
Operation Coldstore. When historian Thum Ping Tjin submitted his writings on
the 1963 arrest of over 100 men to the Select Committee earlier this year, he
was effectively challenging the official Singapore narrative by proposing that the
government had carried out Operation Coldstore more to further its own
political agenda as opposed to protecting Singapore from an imminent
Communist takeover. Mr Thum point-blank called the late Mr Lee Kuan Yew a
liar, accusing the government of lying in the history books. It is therefore clear
that even in Singapore, which is often lauded for transparency of governance,
there exist contending versions of past events, and it is naturally supposed that
the leadership chooses and perpetuates the narrative that best supports its own
purposes. In fact, any time a single or dominant organisation is given the power
to officiate a particular version of history, one cannot be fully certain that they
will be absolutely objective and unbiased towards themselves. Some even
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blatantly ignore clear truths to favour a lie, such as in Japan, where students have
long been given a very watered-down and historically inaccurate account of the
atrocity that was the Rape of Nanjing. These students could very well grow up
with a rose-tinted view of their own country—but it appears to matter less to
the Japanese government that their students know the truth than that their pride
is retained. Therefore, as long as there remain powerful groups and individuals
looking to serve themselves, lies will persist in the history that is passed down.
But let us take a step back [and consider the other parties involved in fashioning
history as we know it]. To insist that simply because these self-serving entities
do exist and thus all history is nothing but a lie is to ignore the hard work of
many others. By this I mean that the majority of what is established as history
does go through rigorous cross-checking of many who seek out evidence for
truths. For example, how would I have known the numbers of deaths in the Rape
of Nanjing in Japan’s official history records is far lower than what it actually is?
And where did I get the idea of what something ‘actually is’? This is made possible
by truths that are revealed and accepted (almost) globally that debunk lies and
false ‘histories’ some try to stick to. Another example would be how with
Gorbachev’s ‘glasnost’—the movement towards transparency—came a more
educated Russian populace that realised how false the Kremlin’s propaganda
could be. The subsequent disillusionment-fuelled movements showed the power
of the people to demand truth. And in a time when the general public is getting
more and more educated and aware of their rights, the right to information and
thus to the facts of history is getting harder for leadership to deny. This is
especially so with the increasing prevalence of technology—the Internet
essentially being a place to communicate information—as well as globalisation.
People now get information about their history from more than just what is set
down as the official records, and to maintain political capital and credibility,
governments, leaders and any other people of influence must tell the truth. Thus
history records today are not as full of lies as the cynic would suggest.
and South Korea’s President Moon is an example of this. The two leaders met
at a symbolic venue—the village of Panmunjom in the demilitarised border
zone—to discuss the possibility of denuclearisation and other steps towards
peace. This required a great deal of political will of both parties, but even before
that, there was the need to face their long history of strained relations and learn
from that history that peace was their common desire for the region. The
importance of learning from history can also be seen in how significant locations
are conserved and memorials set up, such as the statues of Japan’s ‘comfort
women’ or the Auschwitz concentration camp. These all serve as sobering
reminders of the evil mankind is capable of and should thus avoid, once again
cementing the importance of learning from historical truths.
Comments:
Content: Generally strong grasp of the question’s requirements, addressing some key
issues with insight and conviction. Still, a finer distinction could’ve been made between
deliberate untruths vs lack of evidence/unavoidable selective/biased views that can
affect veracity or accuracy. Also, the notion of competing/complementary
narratives/versions should have been more deeply engaged with.
Language: Strong language throughout, with excellent inflections/variation in sentence
structure to push arguments forward. Organisation of ideas is also very good,
generally.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 | Paper 2 | Passage
Tim Wu writes about how convenience impacts modern society and our outlook on life.
Convenience — that is, the more efficient and easier way of doing personal tasks — is the most
underestimated and least understood force in the world today. As a driver of human decisions, it may
not offer the thrill of sexual desires or the allure of the economist’s incentives. Convenience is boring.
But boring is not the same thing as trivial.
However mundane it seems now, convenience, the great liberator of humankind from labour, was a
utopian ideal. By saving time and eliminating drudgery, we assume it would create the possibility of
leisure. And with leisure would come the possibility of devoting time to learning, hobbies or
whatever else might really matter to us. Convenience would make available to the general
population the kind of freedom for self-cultivation once available only to the aristocracy. In this way,
convenience would also be the great leveller. This idea — convenience as liberation — could be
intoxicating. Food would be prepared with the push of a button. Moving sidewalks would do away
with the annoyance of walking. Clothes would clean themselves or perhaps self-destruct after a day’s
wearing. The end of the struggle for existence could at last be contemplated.
In the developed nations of the 21st century, convenience has emerged as perhaps the most
powerful force shaping our individual lives and our economies. This is particularly true in America,
where, despite all the paeans to freedom and individuality, one sometimes wonders whether
convenience is in fact the supreme value. As Evan Williams, a co-founder of Twitter, recently put it,
“Convenience decides everything”. Convenience seems to make our decisions for us, trumping what
we like to imagine are our true preferences. Easy is better, easiest is best.
Convenience also has the ability to make other options unthinkable. To resist convenience — not to
own a cellphone, not to use Google — has come to require a special kind of dedication that is often
taken for eccentricity, if not fanaticism. In fact, our taste for convenience begets more convenience
through a combination of the economies of scale and the power of habit. The easier it is to use
Amazon, the more powerful Amazon becomes and thus the easier it becomes to use Amazon time
and again. Convenience and monopoly now seem to be natural bedfellows.
Given the growth of convenience — as an ideal, as a value, as a way of life — it is worth asking what
our fixation with it is doing to us and to our country. I don’t want to suggest that convenience is a
force for evil. Making things easier isn’t wicked. On the contrary, it often opens up possibilities that
once seemed too onerous to contemplate and it typically makes life less arduous, especially for those
who are particularly vulnerable to life’s drudgeries.
The dream of convenience is also premised on the nightmare of physical work. But is physical work
always a nightmare? Do we really want to be emancipated from all of it? Perhaps our humanity is
sometimes expressed in inconvenient actions and time-consuming pursuits. Perhaps this is why, with
every advance of convenience, there have always been those who resist it. They resist out of
stubbornness (and it is important to note that they have the luxury to do so) but also because they
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see a threat to their sense of who they are, to their feeling of control over things that matter to
them.
We err in presuming convenience is always good for it has a complex relationship with other ideals
that we hold dear. Though understood and promoted as an instrument of liberation, convenience too
has a dark side. With its promise of smooth, effortless efficiency, it threatens to erase the sort of
struggles and challenges that help give meaning to life. Created to free us, it can become a constraint
on what we are willing to do, and thus in a subtle way it can enslave us. We may surrender too much
when we let convenience decide everything.
If convenience then promised to make life and work easier for you, convenience now seems to be
about making it easier to be you. In fact, most of the powerful and important technologies created
over the past few decades deliver convenience in the service of personalisation and individuality.
Think of the playlist, the Facebook page, the Instagram account. This kind of convenience is no longer
about saving physical labour — many of us don’t do much of that anyway. It is about minimising the
mental resources, the mental exertion, required to choose among the options that express ourselves.
The paradoxical truth I’m driving at is that today’s technologies of individualisation are technologies
of mass individualisation. Customisation can be surprisingly homogenising. Everyone, or nearly
everyone, is on Facebook: It is the most convenient way to keep track of your friends and family, who
in theory should represent what is unique about you and your life. Yet Facebook seems to make us all
the same. Its format and conventions strip us of all but the most superficial expressions of
individuality, such as which particular photo of a beach or mountain range we select as our
background image.
Being a person is only partly about having and exercising choices. It is also about how we face up to
situations that are thrust upon us, about overcoming worthy challenges and finishing difficult tasks —
the struggles that help make us who we are. What happens to human experience when so many
obstacles and impediments and requirements and preparations have been removed?
Today’s cult of convenience fails to acknowledge that difficulty is also a critically important part of
human experience. Climbing a mountain is different from taking the tram to the top, even if you end
up at the same place. We risk becoming people who care mainly or only about outcomes and have
forgotten the value we find in our struggles. Therefore, we need to consciously embrace the
inconvenient — not always, but more of the time.
Hence, individuality has come to reside in making at least some inconvenient choices. You need not
churn your own butter or hunt your own meat but if you want to be someone, you cannot allow
convenience to be the value that transcends all others. Struggle is not always a problem. Though it
exposes us to the risk of frustration and failure, it can also teach us something about the world and
our place in it. Indeed, struggle can be the solution to the question of who you are.
So let’s reflect on the tyranny of convenience, try more often to resist its stupefying power, and see
what happens. We must never forget the joy of doing something slow and something difficult, the
satisfaction of not doing what is easiest. The constellation of inconvenient choices may be all that
stands between us and a life of total, efficient conformity.
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2018 | Y6 | GP Common Test 2 | Paper 2 | AQ Huang Bairun | 18S06A
In this article, Tim Wu discusses how convenience brings about much value but also highlights
some concerns about its possible effects on individuals and societies. How far would you agree
with his observations, relating your arguments to your own experience and that of your
society?
In this article, Tim Wu has noted some benefits convenience brings and its
potential drawbacks on society, some of which is observed in Singapore as well.
Tim Wu has mentioned that convenience has ‘saved time and eliminated
drudgery’ (par 2, line 6). I definitely agree with this observation given that in
Singapore many industries, agencies and groups prioritise efficiency and feasibility.
The most recent example is that of Changi Airport’s new Terminal 4, which
features many automated processes, such as self-check in counters and
automated boarding gates. This automation wave in Changi is motivated by
Changi’s high passenger volume, which demands time and labour-saving
innovations such as these automated processes to reduce the hassle for
travellers. This also aligns with the airport’s vision of providing the most pleasant
experience for travellers. Similarly, a majority of our supermarkets island-wide
now adopts self check-out lanes which save shoppers’ time by reducing queue
times and reduce manpower. The latest NTUC Fairprice outlet in Ghim Moh,
Queenstown has only one manual check-out lane, but offers six automated ones
for shoppers. This is due to the benefits of automation aligning with our nation’s
manpower strategy to improve the skilled level of our workforce by gradually
reducing such labour-intensive, time-consuming and low-skilled jobs.
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On the other hand, Tim Wu also mentioned that convenience can become a
‘constraint on what we are willing to do (par 7, ln 46). I agree that for particular
industries such as ride-hailing and some aspects of education, convenience does
restrict the choices people have to fulfil their needs. The example of Grab in
monopolising the domestic ride-hailing marker with little alternative options
shows that the most convenient option entrenches itself as the default option,
with smaller competitors squeezed out of the market, reducing choices available
to consumers. Similarly Google has become the de facto search engine for
educators and students with a serious lack of home-grown search engines that
could be a viable alternative to Google. These trends occur likely due to
aggressive marketing, especially in the case of Grab, and expansion in multiple
areas, as in the case of Google. Singapore’s favourable business environment
encourages such aggressive expansion, with the state even supporting the
dominant service providers through investments by Temasek Holdings and GIC.
Comments:
Well evaluated – showing awareness of the issues surrounding the topic and Singapore.
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2018 | Y5 | GP Common Test Chew Jay Hong | 19A13A
Assess the view that women have been unfairly treated today.
Firstly, one might argue that in the modern world, there is no apparent unfair
treatment of women. Those who hold this utopian vision of an egalitarian society
of the sexes often cite modern Scandinavian society as a prime example, how
countries such as Norway and Sweden have fully embraced the concept of
gender rights, which has manifested in their laws, social norms and even cultural
practices. For example, a Gallup poll conducted in Sweden in 2015 found that
among 12,000 respondents, 52% had no qualms seeing women in positions of
power, and 63% felt that there was no longer a need for women to take on their
husband’s surname, and that there was no problem for the converse as well.
Scandinavian countries have historically had the lowest rates of sexual
harassment globally for the past decade, and the highest proportion of females
as compared to males, averaging at 46%, can be found in Nordic boardrooms.
The Scandinavian woman, who marries late in her forties and holds a high-ranking
position in her line of work, is an exemplification of the social progress that has
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Those who detract from this argument may claim that such inequality only
manifests in less developed countries that are still deeply entrenched in sexist
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conventions, but this is not the case; not all developed countries are immune
from the unequal treatment of men and women. Within our shores, Singapore
follows one of the few countries in the developed world to have yet to institute
strict laws against marital rape, and instead immunity protection is still granted
to husbands who are accused of such. These archaic laws may not seem to
indicate the disparity of treatment between men and women, but are a reflection
of our own society’s resistance towards more progressive attitudes with regard
to ensuring equality of the sexes. In China, while economic fortunes have seen
leaps and bounds of progress in the past two decades, this is not for societal
perceptions of gender. Women are generally still seen as the lesser sex, as
evidenced by the high proportion of female infanticide cases that plague the
country as a result of its restrictive One-Child Policy. Such crimes are often left
unchecked by local authorities, and this is compounded by the fact that Chinese
society has traditionally valued boys over girls. Consequently, the sex ratio
stands at 117.7 males for every 100 females. Evidently, the manifestations of such
unfair treatment of women goes as far as to include the killing of female babies
for male heirs, which serves as a stark reminder of the pertinence of this issue
even today.
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between men and women, society has also inadvertently skewed the balance of
the sexes by justifying misandrist policies and attitudes in the name of equality.
Therefore, this further reinforces the opinion that there exists an unfair
treatment toward women today.
Comments:
An insightful response, especially the last argument, which provides a different
perspective to gender rights. Good illustration.
Language-wise, very clearly expressed ideas. Linguistically secure. Good range of
vocabulary and sentence structure.
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2018 | Y5 | GP Common Test Ian Tay Rong De | 19S06H
In the last one and a half centuries, mankind, yielding the mighty sword of science
and technology, has cut away many of the chains of plague, disease and disasters
that have put humanity under bondage for thousands of years. Science, which in
ancient times was just a hobby for rich intellectuals, has now become our primary
weapon against the problems that haunt this world today, from famines, to
disease and climate change. Like the steel hull of an icebreaker ship, the progress
of scientific knowledge and the development of technological advancements has
been powerful. It has provided a solution to many problems faced by the world
today as it provides greater understanding of the problem, provides the
economic foundation required to solve the problem, and in many cases also
provides a targeted solution to the problem at hand. However, other factors
still have to be considered, and the world has to muster the determination to
take action, before we can take greater strides towards resolving many issues
the world faces today.
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the theoretical foundation required for the systemic search for targeted and
effective solutions to tackle the problem. In some cases as well, the development
of scientific knowledge provides the political will and driving force for
governments and societies to take steps towards solving the problems that the
world faces. In recent decades, climatologists have developed increasingly
comprehensive models to predict the rise in temperatures caused by global
warming, and the consequences it would bring. Forecasts which show a more
than 4°C rise in temperature by the year 2100 and the effect of rising sea levels
on coastal cities like Shanghai have helped to shine a spotlight on the severity of
climate change, catalyzing public debate and governmental action to tackle this
problem. Therefore, the development of scientific knowledge is absolutely
crucial for the solution to global problems.
With this foundation of scientific knowledge (and sometimes a bit of luck as well),
numerous technologies have been developed, or are being developed, which act
as a targeted solution to many of the problems the world faces today. While
many would point out the impossibility of a “magic pill” solution, it is undeniable
that many technological developments have proven to be major breakthroughs
in solving global issues. One example that would immediately come to mind
would be the success of vaccines. The development of vaccines and their
distribution and use in the past century has led to the complete eradication of
smallpox – the first time in human history that a disease has been wiped off the
face of the earth . Diseases such as polio have also been crushed, only existing
in a few isolated enclaves around the world. Sure, it was no overnight cure, and
required decades of government vaccine programmes and public expenditure,
but without these solutions that have been provided by science and technology,
the curse of smallpox may still be prowling our cities today. Another problem
the world faces today is the problem of energy generation. Fossil fuels are
nonrenewable and polluting, but other renewable energy sources remain
inefficient, and nuclear fission technology poses safety concerns that cannot be
easily dismissed (as seen in the recent Fukushima disaster). One solution
currently being developed by physicists and engineers is nuclear fusion
technology, which provides a promise of high efficiency and importantly, zero
production of polluting or radioactive waste. While breaking even (where the
energy output of the plant is greater than the energy input) remains elusive,
scientists are extremely close to that goal, and are confident that commercial
nuclear fusion plants can be built in just a couple of decades’ time. The building
of ITER, the world’s largest experimental nuclear fusion reactor, brings us one
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step closer to the goal of clean, efficient, safe and renewable energy generation.
Thus, scientific developments and technological advancements provides targeted
solutions to deal with the global problems that we face.
In spite of the power of science and technology, for real strides to be taken to
solve global problems, other factors such as economics, governance and political
will have to be addressed. Despite the technological advancements brought
about by the Green Revolution such as GM (genetically modified) crops and High
Yielding Varieties, the developing world is still facing a food crisis where food
prices remain high. This is partly due to the economic policies in various
countries; agricultural subsidies provided by the European Union have led to
unnecessary surpluses leading to the dumping of food on global markets. Under
the leadership of Robert Mugabe in Zimbabwe, farms were confiscated from
their white owners and given to black farmers who were poorly trained and
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What has always drawn me to the field of science and technology is the great
potential that it has to bring about revolutionary changes in the world, and the
great power that it gives to individuals, communities, countries and the world,
to make the world a better place. Science is a great liberator, liberating the
world from plagues and disease, liberating the world from poverty and inequity,
and releasing us from the bondage of technological constraints. Ultimately,
science is fair, and blind to the social and geographical divisions in the world;
science has the power to benefit every nation equally. Science and technology
is perhaps the first step we can take to put an end to poverty, famine, disease
and climate disasters, but it has to go hand in hand with good governance,
political will, and our determination to succeed. With the sword of science and
technology in our hand, there is nothing that we cannot overcome!
Comments:
A thoughtful response, with some insightful parts. Analysis is evident and good
examples were raised. Language used was generally very good. An effective
introduction & conclusion were provided, with varied sentence structures and wide-
ranging vocabulary displayed.
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2018 | Y5 | GP Common Test Keane Loi Jun Yi | 19S03D
“He felt the shuttle slow to a stop. And with that, he had just finished an hour-
long moon flight.” These lofty words, taken from the iconic film “2001: A Space
Odyssey”, describes an ordinary man’s near-routine flight from the earth to the
moon. Unfortunately, space flights have yet to become as mundane and
commonplace as predicted by dreamers of the past. However, we have certainly
surpassed their expectations in various other ways, through the scientific and
technological developments of modern medicine, the internet, and various other
achievements which they could not have even dreamt of. Science fiction has
correctly predicted one fact: despite extensive scientific and technological
developments, global problems such as energy crisis and terrorism remain a
reality and a feature of both the past and the present. Although the scale and
scope of technological developments is astonishing, helping to play an important
role in various global problems, it is undeniable that science and technology is
heavily limited in their capabilities to solve global problems, and may even be the
cause or enabling factor of some of them.
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monopolistic power in inflating the price of the drug Daraprim to many times its
original price - it is certain that those with financial power can still abuse
technology for their own gains, rather than to help solve global problems.
Comments:
Content: Wide-ranging and fully relevant examples, with sustained clarity of argument.
Thoughtful with a depth of evaluation and appropriate and effective illustration.
Language: Effective and competent. Clear organisation and flow, effective paragraphing
and linking words. Some evidence of ranged variation in sentence structure and
vocabulary
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2018 | Y5 | GP Common Test Lim Zinn-E | 19S06J
The famously morose philosopher Thomas Hobbes once remarked that life was
“nasty, brutish and short”. However, scientific advances have allowed mankind
to enter an age of prosperity and hope – medical technology has increased our
life expectancy, while gadgets such as Amazon Alexa make our lives so much
more convenient. However, the impact of these developments on an
international scale is debatable, with a fifth of the world still living under the
poverty line of US$1.90 a day. The very existence of these global issues raise
doubts with regards to technology’s ability to truly address them, but I am of the
opinion that scientific or technological advances can be a solution to global
problems.
Proponents of the view that science and technology are unable to solve global
problems often cite the lack of access less-developed countries have to these
advances. Research and development is a costly process, with Singapore investing
$16 billion into this area alone. To many less developed countries across the
world, these astronomical sums are all but out of reach. This problem is
exacerbated by the profit-driven nature of science and technology today, with
companies raising prices and squeezing consumers to the very last cent. For
instance, genetically modified crops were hailed as the panacea to world hunger,
but the profit-driven nature of the industry ultimately led to disaster. Monsanto,
one of the biggest players in the GM crop market, is notorious for raising their
seed prices and genetically modifying them to be infertile. As such, farmers are
forced to purchase a new batch of seeds every season, leading to lower profits.
In India, the problem has escalated to the point where farmers are committing
suicide due to the heavy losses incurred. Although scientific or technological
developments hold much potential in solving numerous pressing global issues,
they are ultimately unable to realize this potential due to the financial limitations
of research and development, as well as the profit-driven nature of research.
With technology such as genetically modified crops out of reach for these less-
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developed countries, problems cannot be solved on a global scale, and are limited
to wealthier countries that have the financial muscle to support and fund this
research. In this way, technology only serves to further entrench the inequality
that is responsible for many global problems today. Evidently, the benefits of
scientific or technological developments can be considered to be skewed in
favour of wealthier countries. This results in less developed countries being left
behind, which will only serve to create more global problems.
However, technological developments driven by need and not profit can serve
as an equaliser, helping societies across the world progress. Scientific research
is able to develop novel approaches to solving problems that have long existed
on a global scale. The lack of clean water is a problem which has confronted
humanity for centuries. From deadly cholera outbreaks in 19th century London,
to the current water crisis that the city of Flint, Michigan faces, to wells
contaminated by fecal matter in African villages, water is an issue that is faced by
not only less-developed countries, but wealthier countries as well.
Developments in filtration technology have allowed residents of Flint and
children in less-developed countries alike to gain access to clean water, with
chlorine tablets and activated carbon filters available at a low cost. With a greater
emphasis on providing cheaper alternatives to existing solutions on the market,
scientific and technological advances are becoming more accessible to everyone.
By benefitting those that are truly in need of help, technology is able to act as a
leveller, reducing inequality on a global scale. Scientific or technological
developments can be a solution to global problems since there is today a greater
emphasis on making technology readily available at a low cost.
Comments:
Zinn-E, this is a well-expressed essay that shows adept control of the language. I’d have
liked a more in-depth examinations of the limitations of Science and Technology in
solving global problems but overall, your essay convincingly supports your stand.
Perspectives surfaced are sensible and paragraphs purposefully developed to present
coherent arguments. Well done!
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2018 | Y5 | GP Common Test Andrew Lau Ka Keong | 19A01B
Some would argue that in our polarised political climate, traditional media
remains a much-needed platform for civil, constructive discourse. The rise of
social media, citizen journalism and fringe news sites has undoubtedly created an
extremely adversarial political culture. Non-traditional news sites such as
Breitbart consistently peddle right-wing propaganda, and even social media, such
as Facebook and Reddit, is filled with groups firmly on either side of the political
spectrum. The sheer lack of moderation and oversight, and ease of access of
such new media allows for the creation of echo chambers where people
consistently reinforce one another’s political beliefs and ideologies. And
therefore this results in the dissemination of views and information that, even if
technically factual, are heavily weighted with a partisan slant and refuse to engage
with the opposing view. This is where traditional media comes in – establishment
newspapers and television stations, with their editorial oversight and reputation
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Aside from furthering political debate, traditional media outlets also present an
authoritative, legitimate source of information. Traditional news media, crucially,
has editorial oversight – this means that there is a certain amount of filtering
being done, ensuring that the information it releases is up to par. Moreover,
traditional news media such as CNN, BBC or even Channel News Asia in
Singapore have a reputation of trustworthiness to upkeep – forcing them to
always ensure that their content is largely credible and up to quality. In contrast,
with the advent of newer, non-mainstream forms of media, fake news has
become widespread, due to a lack of gatekeepers or fact-checkers to ensure
accuracy. The sheer accessibility and ease of use of social media – you simply
type a few words, press a button and your work is there for the world to see –
has therefore created a rise in online falsehoods or blatantly biased information.
The fact that many countries, such as Singapore, Malaysia and Germany have
established fake news laws is a testament to this. What we therefore have is the
traditional media serving as an essential counterweight to the new media,
providing objective facts to the populace.
However, this need not always be the case – in fact, even traditional media has
demonstrated a penchant for sensationalism. A survey of British television and
documentary filmmakers found that 52% of them faced pressure to distort the
truth to create a ‘more sensational, exciting and entertaining’ programme.
Clearly, in the present-day society, the position of traditional media as a
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Yet another reason for the fall of traditional media is the much greater
accessibility of new media. One way in which this is manifested is in the sheer
reach of new media. At the touch of a button, I can tell the entire world how I
am feeling on Facebook. Such instant, global communication is not something
that can be achieved by print and analog media. But more importantly, new media
is much more convenient. I can view my social media applications, or watch a
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Insightful point, but development is rather brief.
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adapt, it is clear that they will ultimately leave traditional platforms like print
media and television behind.
Comments:
Content: A thoughtful highly relevant response that shows sustained clarity of discussion.
Ideas are developed in some depth and largely backed up with apt and effectively used
illustration. Maturity of thought demonstrated.
Language: Controlled and effective. Very competent. Very clear structure and overall
organisation. Range in vocabulary and sentence structure.
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2018 | Y5 | GP Common Test Lynette Teo Xuan Hui | 19A13A
Those who contend that a country should take care of its own interests before
others would posit that a government’s responsibility is first and foremost to its
own people. It must hence ensure the needs of its own people are met before
allocating resources to foreign aid. If the government were to concentrate a
perceivably excessive amount of resources to fuel development, eradicate
poverty or aid disaster recovery in countries far away from home while the
domestic situation appears bleak, the prioritisation of other countries resources
over self would inevitably incite political discontent. In 2017, the Daily Express
called for a petition against the British government to cut down on foreign aid
spending in light of the National Health Service (NHS) financial struggles back
home. Faced with the coldest winter in decades and a teetering social system
due to an ageing population, the NHS’ resources were stretched thin. Meanwhile,
the British government continued to channel substantial amounts to foreign aid,
amounting to $1 in $7 of the average taxpayers’ annual income. Needless to say,
in such situations, a country’s people may view a government’s hefty investment
in other countries as negligence towards the need of its own people and a breach
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military personnel, it has then continued its aggressive counter against terrorist
groups in Afghanistan. The aforementioned proves that governments must
recognised that countries are not immune to seemingly foreign issues in other
parts of the world and hence they must also consider the interests of other
countries before self.
Of course, the need for countries to act in the interests of others through
measures such as foreign aid cannot be viewed solely through the lenses of a
cost-benefit analysis. Surely, another compelling reason for countries to extend
foreign aid is the moral imperative involved. Developed countries, having enjoyed
years of financial prosperity and whose affluent population continuously strives
to increase their quality of life with unnecessarily luxurious products, are
undeniably morally obligated to serve the needs of their impoverished
counterparts. Key to this argument is the ambiguous definition of “interests”.
Surely, the interests of a metropolitan city like Singapore -- perhaps to increase
GDP or construct more MRT lines – would vastly differ from a developing one
like Kenya, where a substantial amount of the population lack food security and
the most basic of needs. A country’s interests are infinite and insatiable – As the
population grows more affluent, their demands similarly increase in quality and
quantity. And so if a country is to be constantly preoccupied with satisfying its
own interests, when will it ever find the opportune time to look to the interests
of others? Hence, I believe that foreign aid must also stem in part from a genuine
humanitarian effort in forgoing some degree of costs incurred from prioritizing
another country’s interests before self. Granted, taxpayers’ money could be
spent on yet another piece of consumer junk or to boost national income a little
more. Yet, one must also recognise that this same money could be used to save
innocent lives. In 2010, foreign aid donated to the World Health Organization
amounted to $27 per person annually in developing countries. While this may
seem like a meagre amount to us, it can save lives from outbreaks such as malaria,
AIDS or tuberculosis. In fact, the increase in foreign aid correlated with a sharp
fall in childhood deaths from 12 million to 7.4 million in 2010. Hence, even if we
were to discount the practical benefits of foreign aid, it remains that countries,
comprising global citizens with a moral responsibility to our fellow Man around
the world, should not only take care of its own interests but prioritise that of
others when necessary.
Granted, some may contend that a government taking care of others’ interests
before self is an act of negligence or that foreign aid is ineffective in solving
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problems both domestically and abroad. Yet, countries as central players on the
global stage represent the stance we as humanity are to take against unfair
oppression, disease and disaster around the world. Thus, countries must not
always prioritise its own interests over others. Only then can all countries
progress along the development continuum, and only then can we as global
citizens resolutely say we have been morally accountable to the more pressing
needs of our suffering counterparts.
Comments:
Wide-ranging arguments, fully engaged with the question. Examples enhance main
points. Mature discussion. Insightful arguments throughout the essay showing flashes of
originality. Use of language is idiomatic, excellent; varied sentence structures and wide-
ranging vocabulary evident. Evidence of personal voice.
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